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5/13-17/2011. Last revised 8-11-2013.
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handswouldweave Jan 7, 2012   Writer
That final line is absolute perfection. Was it the kind that when you wrote it down you just experienced that sudden moment of profound satisfaction with a fragment of writing? It would have been for me!
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:iconbeeinthebottle:
The ending "felt right" to me, and it *was* satisfying. Then again, I seem to have recurring metaphor I use of drowning. I won't even guess what that means. ;)

Thanks so much for your kind words.
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FollowinTheBlackBird Nov 12, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Sad and lovely. :)
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:iconbeeinthebottle:
Thank you. :heart: Thanks for reading. :glomp:
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FollowinTheBlackBird Nov 15, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you for sharing it. :)
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halcyonshores Oct 28, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
This is quite Excellent, Lisa..
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:iconbeeinthebottle:
Thank you. I'm so glad you like it. :blush:
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halcyonshores Oct 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
:heart:
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Meggie272 Oct 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Oh....wow. Beautiful. Love the nautical theme, although saying that for something as soft and beautiful as this feels weird. Last two lines finish it off wonderfully - and now I have a funny ache in my chest (a good one). Thank you!
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You should get that ache checked by a doctor. ;) Seriously -- thank you, and thanks for reading and commenting.

I seem to have a thing from ending poems with drowning. I'm not quite sure what to make of it. ;)
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