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A pox on rigid writing!
Use your adjectives adverbs
gerunds similes:
"I languidly waltz in water
like a turkey waltzing in sand"

Teach me how to be Type B

It is but a flight of fancy,
to write without worry
Turkey talk makes me nervous, though,
as does the thought of dancing

Teach me how to stay in step

Turkey trot or hippopotamus tango?
One-two-three; I step on toes
I can't fling my arms or shake my legs
without apologies, without looking back
to see who is watching,
who else might be waltzing

Teach me how to hokey-pokey,
help me turn myself around

Only if you teach me how to lead
Five-six-eight; I'm always skipping beats
I can flop around and kick about,
without care, without sureness,
but who will watch, who will follow me?

I tell ya, I don't know what I'm doing
or what it's all about

Eh? I thought you knew,
I'm all bluster—
I hide myself behind metaphorical turkeys
who polka with hippos
in perfectly punctuated formation

So I'll lead and you follow,
then I'll follow your lead
Here we go...
You put your right foot in
and you shake it

That's what it's all about
Revised, my portion only. Because I looked at it again, and I'm Type A.

My first collab, brought about by a less-than-subtle nudge from the lovely Ms. :iconfuzzyhoser: . Everything in italics you can blame on me. (I almost wrote: “She’s the plain text”—but she’s anything but “plain”!)

I *loved* collaborating with her. Once I got past my original resistance, it was a great push for me to loosen up. And that's what it's all about. :)

Don't forget to show her copy (the original!) some love! ----> [link]

Thanks, Ms. Rachel! 12/28-30/2011. Revised 2/29/2012-3/1/2012.
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DarthCJ Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2012  Student Writer
made me think of this lol
:D awesome job!
beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2012   Writer
I can't open the link, so I'll have to trust you on that! Thanks; I'm glad you liked it.
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2012   Writer
this was extremely entertaining! it actually reminded me of a quick witted musical comedy routine. a wonderful collab.
beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012   Writer
Rachel made me do it. :D I'm glad she did. What a trip!
beautyinreview Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Love the conversational element of this, and the light, loose tone. Different from your usual stuff, but I like it.
beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012   Writer
Thank you. It was a lot of fun to do a collab. I've never written with anyone before, or since -- but Ms. FuzzyHoser talked me into it. :) She has a nice, light style to much of her writing.
alapip Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
A-s keep the B-s from going completely
off the reservation, but the B-s do
spread the sweetness we all need -
and sometimes feed the A-s 'a taste
of honey'...

best collab i've ever read!

beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012   Writer
Thank you. :heart: We A's need our B's!
FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
We must match. ;)
I changed mine, also.
beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012   Writer
OK--well I rewrote all of my part. As you might expect would happen. ;)
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